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the one true God is Doctor Doom and we should all be worshiping him.


Holy shit, were you born this autistic, or did it develop when your mother through you down a flight of stairs?

WELCOME STRANGAH

Oh fuck me, how did I make that mistake. Deci's autism must be spreading through the forums. QUICKLY, WE NEED A QUARANTINE!


I'll keep acting like "a 12 year old" because this "12 year old" is going to start making money, big time.



You'll be laughing now, but you won't be laughing later on when you find out how much money I start making.



Doing what exactly? Making your shit tier games? Yeah, you and every other "Indie" developer. I'm just guessing that's what you're talking about though, because lord knows from this thread you can't write for shit.

You know what's interesting? In this era, shit sells. Look at COD and Flappy Bird for examples.

Their's a difference between unoriginal games, and shit that looks and plays so bad you wouldn't make a dime on. And so far, yours seems to be the latter.

WOT'YA BOYIN'? WOT'YA SELLIN'?


 
 
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Is there a reason Tackelberry isn't banned?
Probably because nobody has reported this shit <.<

Lemme go over this thread properly, but from a brief glance someone might be getting bant in a few moments.


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Is there a reason Tackelberry isn't banned?

Damn right. There's a difference between trolling Deci for laughs, and being an asshat for no obvious reason.


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Holy shit, were you born this autistic, or did it develop when your mother through you down a flight of stairs?

WELCOME STRANGAH

Oh fuck me, how did I make that mistake. Deci's autism must be spreading through the forums. QUICKLY, WE NEED A QUARANTINE!


I'll keep acting like "a 12 year old" because this "12 year old" is going to start making money, big time.



You'll be laughing now, but you won't be laughing later on when you find out how much money I start making.



Doing what exactly? Making your shit tier games? Yeah, you and every other "Indie" developer. I'm just guessing that's what you're talking about though, because lord knows from this thread you can't write for shit.

You know what's interesting? In this era, shit sells. Look at COD and Flappy Bird for examples.

Their's a difference between unoriginal games, and shit that looks and plays so bad you wouldn't make a dime on. And so far, yours seems to be the latter.

WOT'YA BOYIN'? WOT'YA SELLIN'?



Better just kill me now. I'm too far gone.


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Is there a reason Tackelberry isn't banned?

I'm too fabulous. Also, you might wanna get that bag of dicks out 'yer bum.

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I'll keep acting like "a 12 year old" because this "12 year old" is going to start making money, big time.



You'll be laughing now, but you won't be laughing later on when you find out how much money I start making.



Doing what exactly? Making your shit tier games? Yeah, you and every other "Indie" developer. I'm just guessing that's what you're talking about though, because lord knows from this thread you can't write for shit.

You know what's interesting? In this era, shit sells. Look at COD and Flappy Bird for examples.

Their's a difference between unoriginal games, and shit that looks and plays so bad you wouldn't make a dime on. And so far, yours seems to be the latter.

What do you want?

Nothing from you. You don't have anything that's good enough quality to give.

Then go away. This is my last warning.


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Um, what?


 
 
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Alrighty well I counted three clear strikes in here from ya tackel, so I'm gonna make that a 30%er. I.e 1 day bannu.
The system can be kind of screwy so if after 24 hours you are still banned PM me and I'll manually reset it.


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I'll keep acting like "a 12 year old" because this "12 year old" is going to start making money, big time.



You'll be laughing now, but you won't be laughing later on when you find out how much money I start making.



Doing what exactly? Making your shit tier games? Yeah, you and every other "Indie" developer. I'm just guessing that's what you're talking about though, because lord knows from this thread you can't write for shit.

You know what's interesting? In this era, shit sells. Look at COD and Flappy Bird for examples.

Their's a difference between unoriginal games, and shit that looks and plays so bad you wouldn't make a dime on. And so far, yours seems to be the latter.

What do you want?

Nothing from you. You don't have anything that's good enough quality to give.

Then go away. This is my last warning.
Before what? You unleash you final form?


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Um, what?

Yeah I wrote a Floodian Short Story. :D


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just... just two things
there's a lot more than that, but

1. all caps dialogue is an annoying eyesore that is very unpleasant to read in excess
2. you only ever need one exclamation point, if you're going to use one at all


 
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There was once a user by the name of Decimator Omega.[1] He didn't understand the concept of the internet[2] that he wasn't suppose to take it seriously[3], but he took everything to heart,[4] even the internet and text on the internet[5]. To him, every negative feedback was a person shouting at him. Deci was losing his mind everyday[7] he spent time chained up to his computer[8]. He doesn't get much food and only gets water from the toilet.[9] He is a slave to the system.[10]
[1] Cliche opening. That might have been what you were going for, but it's still an uninteresting opener.
[2] The "internet" is actually capitalized.
[3] Slightly awkward sentence structure there.
[4] Comma splice? I don't even know, but it just looks wrong. Could've used a dash, maybe.
[5] Repetitive.
[6] Another awkwardly worded sentence.
[7] "Every day". Two words. Yes, there are times when it's one word, but this is not one of those times.
[8] "Chained up"? Seems unnecessarily dramatic. You could say "glued", which has a bit of humor built in.
[9] That's a really bizarre attempt at humor. I wouldn't have mentioned that--it's more weird than anything else.
[10] Cliche, and doesn't really seem to fit the rest of the paragraph.
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Then one day, Deci snaps. But he doesn't snap online. He smashes his computer monitor and goes on a rampage out in the streets of Murrica causing a second civil war over Americans losing their guns.

That was more than enough time to complete his master plan. Deci runs around the apartment looking for his spare computer[1] "Where is it?" he asked himself[2] because all autistic people talk to themselves. "WHERE IS IT?!?"[3] He started shouting.[4]
[1] Forgot a period there.
[2] Comma here.
[3] Unnecessary caps, and multiple question marks.
[4] Redundant. You don't need to add "he said" or "he shouted" after every little bit of dialogue; only every other bit.
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He digs into his closet, finally finds the computer[1] and hooks it up.

"Ahhhh....[2] Linux[3]" He[4] said with ease. Deci opens up a hack tool called LOIC[5] and[6] types in Sep7agon.net in the big bar[7] and[8] hits the lock on[9] button[10] and then[11] hits "I'MMA CHARGIN MY LAZOR!!!"[12] Flooding Sep7agon to oblivion until it is taken offline, he uses a proxy in the process.
[1] Comma.
[2] If you're going to use ellipses with four dots, space them out. Usually, they only have three anyway.
[3] Comma.
[4] "He" should not be capitalized.
[5] What does "LOIC" stand for? Normally, you say the full name, and put the acronym in parentheses.
[6] Instead of saying "and" so much, just put a comma there. "And" should only be used once at the end of a list.
[7] It's called an "address bar".
[8] Again, replace "and" with a comma.
[9] "Lock-on" should have a hyphen.
[10] Comma.
[11] "And then" is one of my biggest pet peeves in writing. It just sounds bad. Just say "and".
[12] No.
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An alarm goes off, Cheat wakes up, cleans the yard, takes out the trash, and goes on Sep7agon.[1] "What the fuck?" Cheat asked himself in confusion[2] seeing that his site is offline. He calls bluehost[3] tech support to try and[4] figure out what is going on[5]. An Indian man answers the phone.[6] Cheat asks the Indian man[7] "Why did my site go offline?" the[8] Indian man[9] said[10] "hold[11] on one moment[12]" and put Cheat on hold. 6[13] hours go by. Cheat is pissed and hangs up. "God[14] what a fucked up day. I need to switch to a new host"[15]
[1] Run-on sentence.
[2] Comma.
[3] Capitalization.
[4] "Try to figure out".
[5] "What is going on" is just another hackneyed phrase that we're all tired of reading.
[6] Ethnic stereotype humor can be funny at times. This was not one of those times.
[7] Comma.
[8] Capitalization.
[9] All right, we get it, he's Indian. It's not gonna get funnier if you keep mentioning it.
[10] Comma.
[11] Capitalization.
[12] Comma.
[13] You should always spell out numbers less than 1000.
[14] Comma.
[15] Punctuation. Remember--the period goes inside the quotation marks when ending a piece of dialogue.

i'm getting bored of this

i haven't even got into the story structure--this is all just grammar checking


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Anyway:

There was once an angry Decimator. He was so angry, that he got banned. The end.


 
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The Rage....
There was once a user by the name of Decimator Omega.[1] He didn't understand the concept of the internet[2] that he wasn't suppose to take it seriously[3], but he took everything to heart,[4] even the internet and text on the internet[5]. To him, every negative feedback was a person shouting at him. Deci was losing his mind everyday[7] he spent time chained up to his computer[8]. He doesn't get much food and only gets water from the toilet.[9] He is a slave to the system.[10]
[1] Cliche opening. That might have been what you were going for, but it's still an uninteresting opener.
[2] The "internet" is actually capitalized.
[3] Slightly awkward sentence structure there.
[4] Comma splice? I don't even know, but it just looks wrong. Could've used a dash, maybe.
[5] Repetitive.
[6] Another awkwardly worded sentence.
[7] "Every day". Two words. Yes, there are times when it's one word, but this is not one of those times.
[8] "Chained up"? Seems unnecessarily dramatic. You could say "glued", which has a bit of humor built in.
[9] That's a really bizarre attempt at humor. I wouldn't have mentioned that--it's more weird than anything else.
[10] Cliche, and doesn't really seem to fit the rest of the paragraph.
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Then one day, Deci snaps. But he doesn't snap online. He smashes his computer monitor and goes on a rampage out in the streets of Murrica causing a second civil war over Americans losing their guns.

That was more than enough time to complete his master plan. Deci runs around the apartment looking for his spare computer[1] "Where is it?" he asked himself[2] because all autistic people talk to themselves. "WHERE IS IT?!?"[3] He started shouting.[4]
[1] Forgot a period there.
[2] Comma here.
[3] Unnecessary caps, and multiple question marks.
[4] Redundant. You don't need to add "he said" or "he shouted" after every little bit of dialogue; only every other bit.
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He digs into his closet, finally finds the computer[1] and hooks it up.

"Ahhhh....[2] Linux[3]" He[4] said with ease. Deci opens up a hack tool called LOIC[5] and[6] types in Sep7agon.net in the big bar[7] and[8] hits the lock on[9] button[10] and then[11] hits "I'MMA CHARGIN MY LAZOR!!!"[12] Flooding Sep7agon to oblivion until it is taken offline, he uses a proxy in the process.
[1] Comma.
[2] If you're going to use ellipses with four dots, space them out. Usually, they only have three anyway.
[3] Comma.
[4] "He" should not be capitalized.
[5] What does "LOIC" stand for? Normally, you say the full name, and put the acronym in parentheses.
[6] Instead of saying "and" so much, just put a comma there. "And" should only be used once at the end of a list.
[7] It's called an "address bar".
[8] Again, replace "and" with a comma.
[9] "Lock-on" should have a hyphen.
[10] Comma.
[11] "And then" is one of my biggest pet peeves in writing. It just sounds bad. Just say "and".
[12] No.
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An alarm goes off, Cheat wakes up, cleans the yard, takes out the trash, and goes on Sep7agon.[1] "What the fuck?" Cheat asked himself in confusion[2] seeing that his site is offline. He calls bluehost[3] tech support to try and[4] figure out what is going on[5]. An Indian man answers the phone.[6] Cheat asks the Indian man[7] "Why did my site go offline?" the[8] Indian man[9] said[10] "hold[11] on one moment[12]" and put Cheat on hold. 6[13] hours go by. Cheat is pissed and hangs up. "God[14] what a fucked up day. I need to switch to a new host"[15]
[1] Run-on sentence.
[2] Comma.
[3] Capitalization.
[4] "Try to figure out".
[5] "What is going on" is just another hackneyed phrase that we're all tired of reading.
[6] Ethnic stereotype humor can be funny at times. This was not one of those times.
[7] Comma.
[8] Capitalization.
[9] All right, we get it, he's Indian. It's not gonna get funnier if you keep mentioning it.
[10] Comma.
[11] Capitalization.
[12] Comma.
[13] You should always spell out numbers less than 1000.
[14] Comma.
[15] Punctuation. Remember--the period goes inside the quotation marks when ending a piece of dialogue.

i'm getting bored of this

i haven't even got into the story structure--this is all just grammar checking
Oh my god, you would literally be the savior of my essays in class.


 
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Anyway:

There was once an angry Decimator. He was so angry, that he got banned. The end.
this post made me look this up on a whim, expecting to find no results

but it's very real


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Anyway:

There was once an angry Decimator. He was so angry, that he got banned. The end.
this post made me look this up on a whim, expecting to find no results

but it's very real
My job here is done.


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There was once a user by the name of Decimator Omega.[1] He didn't understand the concept of the internet[2] that he wasn't suppose to take it seriously[3], but he took everything to heart,[4] even the internet and text on the internet[5]. To him, every negative feedback was a person shouting at him. Deci was losing his mind everyday[7] he spent time chained up to his computer[8]. He doesn't get much food and only gets water from the toilet.[9] He is a slave to the system.[10]
[1] Cliche opening. That might have been what you were going for, but it's still an uninteresting opener.
[2] The "internet" is actually capitalized.
[3] Slightly awkward sentence structure there.
[4] Comma splice? I don't even know, but it just looks wrong. Could've used a dash, maybe.
[5] Repetitive.
[6] Another awkwardly worded sentence.
[7] "Every day". Two words. Yes, there are times when it's one word, but this is not one of those times.
[8] "Chained up"? Seems unnecessarily dramatic. You could say "glued", which has a bit of humor built in.
[9] That's a really bizarre attempt at humor. I wouldn't have mentioned that--it's more weird than anything else.
[10] Cliche, and doesn't really seem to fit the rest of the paragraph.
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Then one day, Deci snaps. But he doesn't snap online. He smashes his computer monitor and goes on a rampage out in the streets of Murrica causing a second civil war over Americans losing their guns.

That was more than enough time to complete his master plan. Deci runs around the apartment looking for his spare computer[1] "Where is it?" he asked himself[2] because all autistic people talk to themselves. "WHERE IS IT?!?"[3] He started shouting.[4]
[1] Forgot a period there.
[2] Comma here.
[3] Unnecessary caps, and multiple question marks.
[4] Redundant. You don't need to add "he said" or "he shouted" after every little bit of dialogue; only every other bit.
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He digs into his closet, finally finds the computer[1] and hooks it up.

"Ahhhh....[2] Linux[3]" He[4] said with ease. Deci opens up a hack tool called LOIC[5] and[6] types in Sep7agon.net in the big bar[7] and[8] hits the lock on[9] button[10] and then[11] hits "I'MMA CHARGIN MY LAZOR!!!"[12] Flooding Sep7agon to oblivion until it is taken offline, he uses a proxy in the process.
[1] Comma.
[2] If you're going to use ellipses with four dots, space them out. Usually, they only have three anyway.
[3] Comma.
[4] "He" should not be capitalized.
[5] What does "LOIC" stand for? Normally, you say the full name, and put the acronym in parentheses.
[6] Instead of saying "and" so much, just put a comma there. "And" should only be used once at the end of a list.
[7] It's called an "address bar".
[8] Again, replace "and" with a comma.
[9] "Lock-on" should have a hyphen.
[10] Comma.
[11] "And then" is one of my biggest pet peeves in writing. It just sounds bad. Just say "and".
[12] No.
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An alarm goes off, Cheat wakes up, cleans the yard, takes out the trash, and goes on Sep7agon.[1] "What the fuck?" Cheat asked himself in confusion[2] seeing that his site is offline. He calls bluehost[3] tech support to try and[4] figure out what is going on[5]. An Indian man answers the phone.[6] Cheat asks the Indian man[7] "Why did my site go offline?" the[8] Indian man[9] said[10] "hold[11] on one moment[12]" and put Cheat on hold. 6[13] hours go by. Cheat is pissed and hangs up. "God[14] what a fucked up day. I need to switch to a new host"[15]
[1] Run-on sentence.
[2] Comma.
[3] Capitalization.
[4] "Try to figure out".
[5] "What is going on" is just another hackneyed phrase that we're all tired of reading.
[6] Ethnic stereotype humor can be funny at times. This was not one of those times.
[7] Comma.
[8] Capitalization.
[9] All right, we get it, he's Indian. It's not gonna get funnier if you keep mentioning it.
[10] Comma.
[11] Capitalization.
[12] Comma.
[13] You should always spell out numbers less than 1000.
[14] Comma.
[15] Punctuation. Remember--the period goes inside the quotation marks when ending a piece of dialogue.

i'm getting bored of this

i haven't even got into the story structure--this is all just grammar checking

Fuck man. I didn't know you were such a grammar Nazi.


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There was once an angry Decimator. He was so angry, that he got banned. The end.

Stop.

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Anyway:

There was once an angry Decimator. He was so angry, that he got banned. The end.

Stop.

:/
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Anyway:

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Stop.

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Fuck man. I didn't know you were such a grammar Nazi.
if you're writing a story, grammar is kind of important


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Fuck man. I didn't know you were such a grammar Nazi.
if you're writing a story, grammar is kind of important

I was in a rush. I was doing the story, and a powerpoint presentation for school around midnight to 1 in the morning my time.

I would attempt revising this now, but no point.


 
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but it's very real
it has fucking spoiler tags in the trope list

omg i'm dying


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I DONT GIVE A SINGLE -blam!- MOTHER -blam!-ER ITS A MOTHER -blam!-ING FORUM, OH WOW, YOU HAVE THE WORD NINJA BELOW YOUR NAME, HOW MOTHER -blam!-ING COOL, NOT, YOUR ARE NOTHING TO ME BUT A BRAINWASHED PIECE OF SHIT BLOGGER, PEOPLE ONLY LIKE YOU BECAUSE YOU HAVE NINJA BELOW YOUR NAME, SO PLEASE PUNCH YOURAELF IN THE FACE AND STAB YOUR EYE BECAUSE YOU ARE NOTHING BUT A PIECE OF SHIT OF SOCIETY
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