A light mist had already established itself upon the woods, but the birds perched above cared nothing about it. Croons and melodies were loud in the air, the winged singers providing a score for the act of madness below.

"Where do you want it?" Joanna asked as they broke into the woods.

Ellette looked up at Joanna, perplexed.

"The slice," Joanna said harshly. "Do you want the head or the throat?"

Ellette was petrified. Her eyes shone no more. "Head, I suppose. But please do not do it suddenly - tell me before you do it."

Bro no offense but your writing is so boring I literally can't even force my eyes to focus on the words they ain't having it

Bro no offense but your writing is so boring I literally can't even force my eyes to focus on the words they ain't having it

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how is it boring'

I have trhese characters and ideas buyt I want to be able to express them in an entertaining manner

Also...


"Ellette looked up at Joanna, perplexed."
THIS IS A COMMA SPLICE PLEASE TRY AGAIN.

It should be:
"Ellette looked up at Joanna perplexed"

Quote from: Kitsuné on July 18, 2017, 08:40:42 AM

That's not how you use "croon" in a sentence... "Croons" is not a word.

nah, any verb can be a noun tbh

it's a tad awkward in this instance, but it's not technically incorrect

It's only used as croons in the present tense.


Example: "This place is the best" Mary croons.


Croon is the most awkward noun. I can't even.

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