I have a confession to make (srsly)

Jester · May 12, 2015, 08:47:26 PM

I created a short romance story a long time ago.

And it actually got some pretty good reviews. So fuck you bitches.

Jester · May 12, 2015, 08:49:57 PM

I should probably write another entry in my Sci-Fi book.

Hooray for failed authors

Kitsune 狐 · May 12, 2015, 08:50:08 PM

I wanna read!
LINK IT NOW!

Jester · May 12, 2015, 09:15:03 PM

Quote from: Kitsunekun on May 12, 2015, 08:50:08 PM

I wanna read!
LINK IT NOW!

Me and Paige met on the Internet in 2005 and decided to write a book. Sadly, we split up before we finished the second part.

*prepare for cringe since I wasn't a very good writer at the time*

Spoiler

I felt completely different to how I feel around other men. He was thrilling. There was so many different things about it that made it even better to be around him!

She was the most beautiful women I've ever seen. But I knew she would never accept me! I was a loser. Outcast. But at least I had a heart!

Most men nowadays think women want diamonds and pretty things like that but for me it's different. I wanted love and passion,honesty and trust. I didn't know his name I just knew him as anonymous. Trying to find out who he was,was just exciting. I wanted him more!

I knew her as Paige. Sadly she only knew me as anonymous. That's what everybody knew me as! One day I looked to giving my name when the time is right. But for now I'll just have to wait. I hate that word!
I
wanted to know him more. His name,his story,just anything. Everything about him I wanted.
I never spoke to him, I thought he wouldn't want to speak to people like me. I saw him and walked past him repeating my steps. Just to get a glimpse off him.

Before my mother passed she told me that if I met somebody I cared for I should tell instead of waiting. So that's what I did. The next time I saw her I would hope to god that my luck wouldn't run out!

I went to the park where you would always see him. Just
sitting there on the bench. I walked past and heard something, not knowing what it was I walked away. My smile faded. I wanted to speak to him I just couldn't find the words. He'd never want to speak to someone like me.

I saw her pass me when I spoke. I didn't know if she couldn't her me or if she WANTED to ignore me. All I knew is that it hurt when it unfolded. So there I was in the rain, not feeling it out of either shock or pain. But in my heart I knew it wasn't over. It couldn't end now..,

I had this urge to run. I don't know why I just ran. I ran everywhere I ran top to bottom. I ended the run at the park he was still sat there gazing. At first I thought I just had butterflies but the next thing I know is I collapse onto the floor. Breathing stops. Breathe goes.

I saw Paige instantly collapse. The first thing I did was check if she was still breathing. Luckily she kept a steady breathing rate! My biggest concern was the fall she took on the pavement. An ambulance arrived and took her to Saint Mary's Hospital near the park.

When I woke up it was blurry, I felt my head. It was wrapped in bandages. There was someone holding my hand,I couldn't see who it was but I knew,I knew it was him. My heart rate went up. I smiled. I swear he smiled back. I held his hand tighter. I was glad he was with me.

I knew it wasn't over. The moment I saw that she was okay was the moment I was confident about sharing my name with somebody in the longest time I could remember.

The blur went away. I could see. I saw him,I got butterflies,I smiled and said hello. I sat up,I just gazed into his eyes. I didn't know what to say to him. I was just stuck in the moment. I lent over and he went to catch me as I nearly fell I grabbed my chest.
While everything seemed perfect it wasn't. I had to cherish her being in my arms for as long as I could. Because next week I'll have to march to my death in the Middle East.

There was tears coming from his eyes as I ley in that hospital bed.
"Paige"? He looked at me.
"Anonymous"?
We both laughed. We both felt the same, it wasn't awkward. I just hugged him. I loved him even though I knew nothing about him I loved him.

"Just call me Jordan" I laughed. Finally something in my life felt right!

cuneif · May 12, 2015, 09:25:19 PM

Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 09:15:03 PM

Quote from: Kitsunekun on May 12, 2015, 08:50:08 PM
I wanna read!
LINK IT NOW!
Me and Paige met on the Internet in 2005 and decided to write a book. Sadly, we split up before we finished the second part.

*prepare for cringe since I wasn't a very good writer at the time*

Spoiler
I felt completely different to how I feel around other men. He was thrilling. There was so many different things about it that made it even better to be around him!

She was the most beautiful women I've ever seen. But I knew she would never accept me! I was a loser. Outcast. But at least I had a heart!

Most men nowadays think women want diamonds and pretty things like that but for me it's different. I wanted love and passion,honesty and trust. I didn't know his name I just knew him as anonymous. Trying to find out who he was,was just exciting. I wanted him more!

I knew her as Paige. Sadly she only knew me as anonymous. That's what everybody knew me as! One day I looked to giving my name when the time is right. But for now I'll just have to wait. I hate that word!
I
wanted to know him more. His name,his story,just anything. Everything about him I wanted.
I never spoke to him, I thought he wouldn't want to speak to people like me. I saw him and walked past him repeating my steps. Just to get a glimpse off him.

Before my mother passed she told me that if I met somebody I cared for I should tell instead of waiting. So that's what I did. The next time I saw her I would hope to god that my luck wouldn't run out!

I went to the park where you would always see him. Just
sitting there on the bench. I walked past and heard something, not knowing what it was I walked away. My smile faded. I wanted to speak to him I just couldn't find the words. He'd never want to speak to someone like me.

I saw her pass me when I spoke. I didn't know if she couldn't her me or if she WANTED to ignore me. All I knew is that it hurt when it unfolded. So there I was in the rain, not feeling it out of either shock or pain. But in my heart I knew it wasn't over. It couldn't end now..,

I had this urge to run. I don't know why I just ran. I ran everywhere I ran top to bottom. I ended the run at the park he was still sat there gazing. At first I thought I just had butterflies but the next thing I know is I collapse onto the floor. Breathing stops. Breathe goes.

I saw Paige instantly collapse. The first thing I did was check if she was still breathing. Luckily she kept a steady breathing rate! My biggest concern was the fall she took on the pavement. An ambulance arrived and took her to Saint Mary's Hospital near the park.

When I woke up it was blurry, I felt my head. It was wrapped in bandages. There was someone holding my hand,I couldn't see who it was but I knew,I knew it was him. My heart rate went up. I smiled. I swear he smiled back. I held his hand tighter. I was glad he was with me.

I knew it wasn't over. The moment I saw that she was okay was the moment I was confident about sharing my name with somebody in the longest time I could remember.

The blur went away. I could see. I saw him,I got butterflies,I smiled and said hello. I sat up,I just gazed into his eyes. I didn't know what to say to him. I was just stuck in the moment. I lent over and he went to catch me as I nearly fell I grabbed my chest.
While everything seemed perfect it wasn't. I had to cherish her being in my arms for as long as I could. Because next week I'll have to march to my death in the Middle East.

There was tears coming from his eyes as I ley in that hospital bed.
"Paige"? He looked at me.
"Anonymous"?
We both laughed. We both felt the same, it wasn't awkward. I just hugged him. I loved him even though I knew nothing about him I loved him.

"Just call me Jordan" I laughed. Finally something in my life felt right!

Still a better love story than 50 Shades of Grey.

Jester · May 12, 2015, 09:27:02 PM

Quote from: Moondog on May 12, 2015, 09:25:19 PM

Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 09:15:03 PM

Quote from: Kitsunekun on May 12, 2015, 08:50:08 PM
I wanna read!
LINK IT NOW!
Me and Paige met on the Internet in 2005 and decided to write a book. Sadly, we split up before we finished the second part.

*prepare for cringe since I wasn't a very good writer at the time*

Spoiler
I felt completely different to how I feel around other men. He was thrilling. There was so many different things about it that made it even better to be around him!

She was the most beautiful women I've ever seen. But I knew she would never accept me! I was a loser. Outcast. But at least I had a heart!

Most men nowadays think women want diamonds and pretty things like that but for me it's different. I wanted love and passion,honesty and trust. I didn't know his name I just knew him as anonymous. Trying to find out who he was,was just exciting. I wanted him more!

I knew her as Paige. Sadly she only knew me as anonymous. That's what everybody knew me as! One day I looked to giving my name when the time is right. But for now I'll just have to wait. I hate that word!
I
wanted to know him more. His name,his story,just anything. Everything about him I wanted.
I never spoke to him, I thought he wouldn't want to speak to people like me. I saw him and walked past him repeating my steps. Just to get a glimpse off him.

Before my mother passed she told me that if I met somebody I cared for I should tell instead of waiting. So that's what I did. The next time I saw her I would hope to god that my luck wouldn't run out!

I went to the park where you would always see him. Just
sitting there on the bench. I walked past and heard something, not knowing what it was I walked away. My smile faded. I wanted to speak to him I just couldn't find the words. He'd never want to speak to someone like me.

I saw her pass me when I spoke. I didn't know if she couldn't her me or if she WANTED to ignore me. All I knew is that it hurt when it unfolded. So there I was in the rain, not feeling it out of either shock or pain. But in my heart I knew it wasn't over. It couldn't end now..,

I had this urge to run. I don't know why I just ran. I ran everywhere I ran top to bottom. I ended the run at the park he was still sat there gazing. At first I thought I just had butterflies but the next thing I know is I collapse onto the floor. Breathing stops. Breathe goes.

I saw Paige instantly collapse. The first thing I did was check if she was still breathing. Luckily she kept a steady breathing rate! My biggest concern was the fall she took on the pavement. An ambulance arrived and took her to Saint Mary's Hospital near the park.

When I woke up it was blurry, I felt my head. It was wrapped in bandages. There was someone holding my hand,I couldn't see who it was but I knew,I knew it was him. My heart rate went up. I smiled. I swear he smiled back. I held his hand tighter. I was glad he was with me.

I knew it wasn't over. The moment I saw that she was okay was the moment I was confident about sharing my name with somebody in the longest time I could remember.

The blur went away. I could see. I saw him,I got butterflies,I smiled and said hello. I sat up,I just gazed into his eyes. I didn't know what to say to him. I was just stuck in the moment. I lent over and he went to catch me as I nearly fell I grabbed my chest.
While everything seemed perfect it wasn't. I had to cherish her being in my arms for as long as I could. Because next week I'll have to march to my death in the Middle East.

There was tears coming from his eyes as I ley in that hospital bed.
"Paige"? He looked at me.
"Anonymous"?
We both laughed. We both felt the same, it wasn't awkward. I just hugged him. I loved him even though I knew nothing about him I loved him.

"Just call me Jordan" I laughed. Finally something in my life felt right!

Still a better love story than 50 Shades of Grey.

https://vimeo.com/127675562I remember when I read that

Forgewolf · May 12, 2015, 09:28:00 PM

Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 08:47:26 PM

So fuck you bitches.

I am NOT a female dog, you cumguzzler!

Jester · May 12, 2015, 09:29:18 PM

Quote from: Forgewolf on May 12, 2015, 09:28:00 PM

Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 08:47:26 PM
So fuck you bitches.
I am NOT a female dog, you cumguzzler!

bitch barrel

Jizzwizard

Cumbucket

Kitsune 狐 · May 12, 2015, 09:30:12 PM

I have to contain my fangirling... But I loved it. The two voices were distinct and clear. I only saw one typo when you wrote "her me" instead of "hear me". I didn't pay attentions to punctuation tbh, but this story made my heart flutter thank you.

Forgewolf · May 12, 2015, 09:37:32 PM

Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 09:29:18 PM

Quote from: Forgewolf on May 12, 2015, 09:28:00 PM
Quote from: Jesty on May 12, 2015, 08:47:26 PM
So fuck you bitches.
I am NOT a female dog, you cumguzzler!
bitch barrel

Jizzwizard

Cumbucket

What the fuck did you just fucking say about me, you little biscuit? I’ll have you know I graduated top of my class in the Navy Seals, and I’ve been involved in numerous secret raids on your mom, and I have over 300 confirmed likes. I am trained in gorilla warfare and I’m the top pwner in the entire US armed forces. You are nothing to me but just another dweeb. I will wipe you the fuck out with precision the likes of which has never been seen before on this Earth, mark my fucking words. You think you can get away with saying that shit to me over the Internet? Think again, fucker. As we speak I am contacting my secret network of spies across the USA and your IP is being traced right now so you better prepare for the storm, maggot. The storm that wipes out the pathetic little thing you call your dick. You’re fucking neutered, kid. I can be anywhere, anytime, and I can eaat you in over seven hundred ways, and that’s just with my bare hands. Not only am I extensively trained in unarmed combat, but I have access to the entire arsenal of the United States Marine Corps and I will use it to its full extent to wipe your miserable face off the face of the continent, you little shit. If only you could have known what unholy retribution your little “clever” comment was about to bring down upon you, maybe you would have held your fucking dick. But you couldn’t, you didn’t, and now you’re paying the price, you goddamn hooker. I will shit all over you and you will drown in it. You’re fucking dirty, kiddo.

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I changed a couple of words to not be seen as serious.. because I am not cereal at all

Jester · May 12, 2015, 09:42:17 PM

Quote from: Kitsunekun on May 12, 2015, 09:30:12 PM

I have to contain my fangirling... But I loved it. The two voices were distinct and clear. I only saw one typo when you wrote "her me" instead of "hear me". I didn't pay attentions to punctuation tbh, but this story made my heart flutter thank you.

Thanks. Even though we never finished the second one, I still have some of the rough draft

Spoiler

"Jordan,can I tell you something?"
He just looked at me and smiled.
" I've always wanted to talk to you I just didn't think you'd want to speak to someone like me. Is that weird?"
He just looked at me for a while like I was crazy,he didn't speak for a great amount off time.

"I've been meaning to tell you something, Paige". I said with great sorrow. "I've been drafted into the military". I felt a tear roll down my cheek knowing the risk of fighting in what they called "the red zone".

I just cried grabbing my chest in so much pain but I didn't care about that pain. I was going to loose him as soon as I got him. That's the pain I cared about. I kissed him, then just drifted away. The machines started going off. Doctors ran in.

I was at the hospital worried but I couldn't stay. I had to leave for the war. I faced the hardest decision of my life. To keep the will to move or go into a complete shutdown. I slowly exited the hospital with a picture of Paige in my pocket.

I woke up,wires attached to me. I had been told I was ill but they don't know what it is yet. They said the boy that sat with me left a note.
I read it.

"Dear Paige,
I knew you for a short time but it felt like a life time. Keep in contact. X'

I had hoped that Paige was okay. Because I wasn't. I had undergone training awhile ago so they sent me right into hell. Our mission was to hold off the enemy for as long as we could. But I could only think of Paige.

It turns out I was dying,it took me to randomly start running to find out. I wrote to Jordan letting him know.

"Dear Jordan,
Yes I am dying, my hearts still filled with love for you. I love you. I will stay strong for you." I sent the letter off and cried.

The hardest thing about reading that letter was holding in the tears in front of my fellow troops. Knowing that I couldn't go back into America was enough for me to drop dead. But I couldn't do that. I needed to stay alive. For her.