Why was this account suicide again?
This...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:58:18 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.Funny how these things work. Everything I've ever written starts out with the simple, sexual aspect of things. But, the world and it's characters are important. And in order for things to be right, the characters have to be real, despite how alien they can be. All too often, despite how much sex is ingrained into our culture, in specific instances, it is shamed. What I write is based off simple, common ground shared between everybody. Sometimes, there's more kinks, and the story is more centered around the sexual bits.But I always try to do a little more. In the end, it's not the sex. Sexy times are just the icing on the cake so to speak. The real fun is creating and bringing life to worlds and people. Believe me, I've searched for years. Writers in my particular field are rare. I've only ever heard one person who has the exact same views as I do. She coined the term, "Intelligent Erotica." An extremely obscure aspect for most writers of the genre.Funny enough, a parrallel to why I started writing in the first place. To fill int he gaps and voids for people like me.I agree, there's definitely not enough out there like this. This is more than just smut because there's a real story, raw emotion, a real connection between the characters, and an exploration into human nature. The sexual interaction is, as you said, just the icing on the cake.I wish I wasn't so poor with translating my thoughts into words because otherwise I'd say more.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.Funny how these things work. Everything I've ever written starts out with the simple, sexual aspect of things. But, the world and it's characters are important. And in order for things to be right, the characters have to be real, despite how alien they can be. All too often, despite how much sex is ingrained into our culture, in specific instances, it is shamed. What I write is based off simple, common ground shared between everybody. Sometimes, there's more kinks, and the story is more centered around the sexual bits.But I always try to do a little more. In the end, it's not the sex. Sexy times are just the icing on the cake so to speak. The real fun is creating and bringing life to worlds and people. Believe me, I've searched for years. Writers in my particular field are rare. I've only ever heard one person who has the exact same views as I do. She coined the term, "Intelligent Erotica." An extremely obscure aspect for most writers of the genre.Funny enough, a parrallel to why I started writing in the first place. To fill int he gaps and voids for people like me.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.
the one true God is Doctor Doom and we should all be worshiping him.
that disgraceful Contact Harvest sex scene.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.I'm going with the hog thing. At least one source has mentioned that Hunter armour is made from the same stuff as their warship hull plating.Aside from that, I read up to certain scenes and the writing is pretty good. You seem to have the attitude of the S-II's in there for sure, the only gripe I have is one tht would make the story in itself impossible as theSpartans were indifferent to the other soldiers. They didn't really care what the overall opinion was as long as it didn't affect their mission. However, staying in accordance with that would make this nul anyway.Bretty good, much better written and lore-accurate than most things I have read.
God damn, it's been about a bajillion years since I've read Halo fan fiction.That was better and more professional than that disgraceful Contact Harvest sex scene.Good on you Sandtrap, that was straight up classical Halo goodness.Oh, if I were to criticize this I'd say that you used the word 'bared' to describe readied weapons a bit too much.
Remind me to read this like, tomorrow or something.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:12:35 PMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.In combat, the spikes of a hunter stick p. It is unlikely a 'hog can be impaled on them unless it had ramped off a cliff or something.
Quote from: BaconShelf on November 01, 2014, 08:50:37 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:12:35 PMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.In combat, the spikes of a hunter stick p. It is unlikely a 'hog can be impaled on them unless it had ramped off a cliff or something.Their spikes don't stick up, so much as they stick out. The longest spines of theirs seem to be roughly half the length as the Hunter is tall, so you're looking at 6 feet long minimum. The top ones flare, but generally there's always spines hanging around on the back of them.
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