Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.
Quote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.
This...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?
Quote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:12:35 PMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.In combat, the spikes of a hunter stick p. It is unlikely a 'hog can be impaled on them unless it had ramped off a cliff or something.
Quote from: BaconShelf on November 01, 2014, 08:50:37 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:12:35 PMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 08:25:23 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:35:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:28:38 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:22:50 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:19:13 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 03:14:15 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 03:10:31 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:45:02 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on October 31, 2014, 02:41:01 AMQuote from: Nuka on October 31, 2014, 02:34:43 AMThis...this is really good.Why did you act like this was bad or twisted in any way?Shhhhhh.This one's an easier going one. In fact I think it's the first ever standard human and human thing I've ever written. Everything else, is different.I keep this close to me, because it's hard to find people who walk this blurred line that I do. But, back to things.Told ya I had some class.I find nothing shameful in this. It's well written, tasteful and clearly had a lot of passion put into it. Anyone that has an issue with this is probably just squeamish about sexual encounters.I've actually gained a lot more respect from you after reading this.I don't know about you, but it's been a good night for me. Very good indeed.You know, looking back now, I realize I did a lot of work on this piece. It was a spontaneous idea. And I finished it in roughly two days. But I put a lot of time into this. When I say two days, I really mean two days worth of time spent writing. And most of all, looking through it, I realize all the little things I put into this piece.I looked deep back into my memories of Halo lore. Did some research on what I didn't remember. I found the dates. Did the math on Danielle's age. I even looked up the list of every single Spartan II in canon, and found a service tag that wasn't used. As much as I've always wanted to write about a Spartan, I held off on it. Because to me, their idea, their concept, and in the story, they are respectable people.I didn't want a mary sue character. I didn't want her to be "outside" of what a Spartan was, and is. So in that regard, when I started this, from the beginning, I created a character for the sole purpose of killing them. I played my sad music as I wrote the ending, paused and took breaks to clear my head.I don't know about you, but this piece, in some strange way, breaks my heart. But I'm glad that I wrote it. And personally, I don't think I could have done any better. Most of all, it was good to come back to Halo. I haven't written anything in a long time for it. And this shows how much I've changed over the years, as I've put out stories, and grown as a person.I hope, that in the years to follow, I can keep doing this, pieces of work like this. And I hope, that along the way, that any people who stick around to read what my strange mind can spin up enjoy what I write. I would never trade this for anything.In all honesty, have you considered the idea of novel writing?I don't have the drive for novels. I've always been a short story writer. Like a friend of mine says, short stories are just short novels really. But, you can always take a bundle of short stories and make a novel collection of them. And, I probably would have the number of stories to do it. I've got about 36 completed works, and the unfinished ones bump me up to something like 48. But, in the meantime, no, it's never crossed my mind.This. You should do this.I actually enjoy novels that are collections of short stories, makes them easier to read through. Like one a night before bed kind of thing.Something to consider. Anywho, getting late. I am tired now. But, before I go, since I have a feeling you'll be the only one to have a conversation with, what'd ya think about it? Like I said, taking a look at things, it's fucking amazing all the little things I subconsciously crammed into the bit. Little inspirations and so on.Like I said, I don't think I could have pulled this off any better. But, some external pair of eyes would be nice on the subject. Best parts? Worst parts? That sort of stuff. I even think I pulled all the stops out on grammar as well. Usually miss a few bits and pieces. Anywho, I'll be off. tootles.As someone who has read most of the Halo novels, I really really appreciate your attention to detail. It even felt like I was reading one of the novels. How fast was that hog going that it was enough to outright kill a hunter? Must've been going pretty damn fast.The only thing I can really say is that I was slightly confused in the beginning since I connected the name Douglas to the spartan Douglas, but that was quickly cleared up so no big deal.Warthog was going full blast. The thing about Hunters is, is even though their armour is thick, I imagine that their suits are partly mechanized. They aren't completely indestructable. And one of them got hit in the back. Even if their armour wasn't damaged, the shockwaves alone, directly over an exposed area, reverberating off the metal would kill the worms.Ever had something metal in your hands, a long wrench or something, a tool of some kind, and have it been struck? Those vibrations, depending on the strength, hurt.So if that's the case, I'd imagine that the front of the hog was probably impaled by the hunter's spikes.In combat, the spikes of a hunter stick p. It is unlikely a 'hog can be impaled on them unless it had ramped off a cliff or something.Their spikes don't stick up, so much as they stick out. The longest spines of theirs seem to be roughly half the length as the Hunter is tall, so you're looking at 6 feet long minimum. The top ones flare, but generally there's always spines hanging around on the back of them.
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I have no idea what is going on in this thread.
Quote from: Decimator Omega on November 09, 2014, 12:32:05 AMI have no idea what is going on in this thread.I dropped this in penguin party. It's my wee little secret. And it's not a secret no more. Read if you dare!
Quote from: Sandtrap on November 09, 2014, 12:33:45 AMQuote from: Decimator Omega on November 09, 2014, 12:32:05 AMI have no idea what is going on in this thread.I dropped this in penguin party. It's my wee little secret. And it's not a secret no more. Read if you dare!Eh. I'll pass. Sorry.
Quote from: Decimator Omega on November 09, 2014, 12:34:43 AMQuote from: Sandtrap on November 09, 2014, 12:33:45 AMQuote from: Decimator Omega on November 09, 2014, 12:32:05 AMI have no idea what is going on in this thread.I dropped this in penguin party. It's my wee little secret. And it's not a secret no more. Read if you dare!Eh. I'll pass. Sorry.I expect the worse! And pass off the good. Bad stuff happens, it's no biggie. Good stuff happens, I'm in the twilight zone. But, know that mein stories are different. I walk a strange line. Too strange for you it seems.It's not a bad thing. And, after all, it's writing. It's not like I dropped a shocking image in your lap that you can't unsee. You have the choice.So good on yeh.
I can't even handle it .
I dont know about you but that was good if not great. That ending.
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>naked women appear hereFucking bullshit, post pics instead. Now I have to actually browse for porn, damnit
[NSFW] And thus, I commit account suicide
